Black Ghost

I really liked this, actually! I thought it was well written and you really gave a good setting description about the world the story is in without info dumping or ...

This is one of those stories that actually kept me reading till the end. Nice Job. Although, it seemed as if you were building up to something more dramatic than ...

Capitalize your "i" 's when referring to yourself. It's spelled "something" Also, the second to last line doesn't quite flow, it's a little long. Overall, if you revise this poem ...

This was really interesting. I like how the main character suddenly realized he was in a dream. But I thought the end was a little sad though. But how are ...

I liked this a lot, Phorcys. The only thing that bugged me, though, is why Aiden was so concerned about a random chatter asking him to meet him somewhere at ...

I like this a lot, actually. I thought it was very interesting, right from the first sentence, and it keeps the reader hooked throughout. You don't waste your time with ...

This isn't bad, but it's a little short. Let us get to know Carla a little more and I would suggest making the dialogue between the mermaid and Carla a ...

Wow, are you the youngest person on the site? If you can already write like this when you're nine, then imagine your writing when you get older! My brother is ...

Hi, magicman here, and I think this has some real potential. Although it was a little confusing, I'm sure if you rework it a little it could turn into something ...

I actually thought this was a pretty cool story, I hope you write more of it. “And stupidity even more so, so how about we think before acting,” scoffed Vassis, ...

Critique Initiated The hour was early. 3:06AM. The numbers on the display screen wavered, and I rubbed the sleep from my eyes anxiously, shifting around in my seat as I ...

WOW :shock: That was very good Snoink....I enjoyed it. *walks off in shock* *Edit* Lol, I did think it was really good though. It was really unique, too, unlike most ...

I liked this, It had an interesting story to it.:wink: I was on the ground, sore from head to toe, Wondering how I came to feel like so. I would ...

WHOA! HOT DANG DAT WAS SO COOL I AM GOING TO LIKE SAY HOW COOL IT IS. IT IS COOL LIKE WOWEE WOWEE! WAY BEDDER DAN ROMEO AND JULIET AND ...

Alright! That was something new, for sure. Ummm, I enjoyed this alot, for some reason I couldn't stop reading. I guess the feeling I had the whole time in this ...